Lain of the Wired (REMAKE)

Discussion in 'Art' started by over8000, May 13, 2017.

  1. over8000

    over8000 Eccentric Artist

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    Original (2016)
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    Remake
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    CnC please and what do you think about my progress?
     
  2. Blez

    Blez UH WHOOPS??

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    I can't tell if it's a man or woman

    but uh... I guess a woman. you should make those arms and legs slimmer.
    her head is supposedly smaller because of the ears.

    her shoulders are too broad which makes it like a male kind of shoulders. "muscular" ya feel me.?

    but eh. there's more room for improvement.
     
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  3. litten

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    did you just assume they had a gender??

    yeah but I agree with Blez.. have you tried to look up proportions for bodies??
     
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  4. Seth

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    Well, i'm not too good at art, but still, i'll try to give my best advice. This is
    just coming from a amateur, so don't expect much!

    Well, to start with...

    What you have done right!

    -The backgrounds themselves look pretty good in my opinion. The second background is even
    better!
    -You adjusted the body's size! Very well done! In the first pic, the head was just too
    abnormally big, and the body was way too small.
    -You added more shades! Well... just slightly... but hey, it's something.
    -The eyes look more normal.
    -You made the weird mouth look more normal too!
    -Slightly smoother colors, and they also fit more with the background.

    What you did wrong.

    We will only be talking about what you did wrong in the second picture.

    -First, colors are still pretty boring. Well, more precisely, the shades you use. From what
    i can see, all you did was use 1 color, and then splitted it in 3. One of them was just
    darker, and the other one was brighter. You should try to experiment more with colors, rather
    than brightness! Not sure if i am explaining this well, let me put it in another way.
    Instead of adding/decreasing brigthness, try to change colors. Usually you will
    want to make a color get more blue the darker it gets, and more yellow the brighter it gets, although
    don't always do this, because this can prove to look horrible on certain colors. (Sorry if you
    actually did this and i did not notice LOL). Example: For a red object, the darker it gets,
    the more violet/purple it will become. The brighter it gets, the more pink it will become.

    -Second, the shirt. Try to make the dark part just slightly darker.

    -Third, the skin. She just... looks like a zombie... (Sorry for assuming it's gender)
    Why is it so green? Yeah, i know you wanted to make her skin color fit with the background,
    but considering that the room is all blue (except for the floor), then shouldn't her skin be blue
    instead of green? Or is there some sort of green-light coming out of the ground
    that's reflecting on her skin to make it look green? If so, make this noticeable by
    adding bright lights on the ground.

    -Fourth, i'm not really sure if it's a man or a woman... But let's say it's a woman.
    In that case, you might want to make the legs a little bit thinner, and give the body
    more curves. Same goes for the shape of her head, give it more curves instead of
    straight lines.

    -Fifth, that face... It scared me a little bit when i first saw it. Make the eyes a bit smaller
    and the iris aswell. Also if you're trying to make her ( if it is a her ) look more girly,
    try to make her eyes a bit more round than wide.

    Extra: The sitting pose looks weird... She does not quite look like she's sitting. I don't
    know how to explain it though.

    Hope this had been useful even if just a little bit! I really like the backgrounds.

    Also, SORRY FOR BEING SO LATE ;-;
     
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  5. Taki

    Taki Delete me
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    If it's supposed to be a half human half dwarf, then good job and awesome idea, gave me laughs.
    Otherwise there is too much wrong to point everything out, there are flaws on every body part, so i'm not going to. I just recommend that you look up some basic tutorials and draw with references before you try drawing from your imagination again.
    Don't try to finish a drawing until you feel you made a significant improvement, you just waste time where you could study. It's less fun, but more effective if you want to improve and you can still post your sketches for cnc.
     
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