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Adventurers' Saga

Discussion in 'Comics' started by Castleofskies, Dec 30, 2017.

  1. Castleofskies

    Castleofskies Newbie

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    And I made this comic, I can't think of a title yet. Here goes o3o ~

    Links just in case ^^" :
    Chapter 1 -
    Page 1: https://i.imgur.com/LdOuX9W.png
    Page 2: https://i.imgur.com/m8Ryub2.png

    Chapter 2 (Unfinished) -
    Page 1: https://i.imgur.com/KjVscuM.png
    Page 2: https://i.imgur.com/l7C21kD.png
    Page 3: https://i.imgur.com/xlKIbYH.png

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    Harsh CnCs are encouraged :D , also credits-
    Kirimy maps
    Arrowroot
    Maplestory design
    wz files rip
    My notebook
    Boredom ^^"
     
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  2. bluezemmi

    bluezemmi hungry as a hippo
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    Not sure if you are a beginner, but you understand how to use speechbubbles, the way how a comic should be read (left to right without any confusion) and the basic use of panels. Props to that good job.

    Do work on resizing your scenes. Like animations, scenes can be resized and zoomed in if something detailed is happening.
    Not saying that keeping it normal sized is bad since it is a perfect way to show the place where the characters are.
    But overusing the same sized sprites in panels can get very boring for the readers.

    Definitely should add some comic sound effects. Reading the fight against the dragon felt dull without comic effects. Adding sounds like 'Thwack' 'Whack' and 'Wham' adds more feel of watching an actual fight.

    I recommend to give your panels a black outline and instead of a black background, use a white background.
    Gives more of a standard western comic feel.
     
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  3. Castleofskies

    Castleofskies Newbie

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    I consider myself a beginner :X . I don't really take note of sound effects due to my reading habits, but now that you mention it, there was a part where Sheldon does the finishing blow without killing the Dragon, and adding blunt attack SFX like 'whack' would show it clearly. Yes, and the black background, I do realise in some parts where some panels blends in too well with the background, that it looks like one image. Will put them in mind when making the next chapter, thanks alot! ^_^
     
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  4. Castleofskies

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    Chapter 2 is out ^^ !

    Sidenotes: I didn't finish the chapter like I wanted to, the content is longer than I'd expect >.< . Sighh... the series looks like a work that is about to be axed by the publishers... But February will be a busy month for me, with dinners & celebrations D:< , I'm more worried about my birthday, will be hitting 20 next week, I feel old now >.<
     
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  5. bluezemmi

    bluezemmi hungry as a hippo
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    Damn the cliffhanger. Just started to reading it deep and then it ends.

    Can't wait for more man great job.
     
  6. lieow123

    lieow123 Senior Membah'

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    Not sure if I should CnC on Chapter 1, just want to point out there should be a scene where it showed the dragon fleeing in the next pane after Sheldon used "Rivt Style: Divine Threads".
    Having more interactions among the actors feels more in depth imo. We as the viewer don't know what's going on and can only imagine the story based on the what we see. Shayun saying the dragon fleed without showing it actually doing so felt like the fight was dull and something not worth remembering. Really feels off when the fight was intense.

    For Chapter 2, I imagine if u give a sort of exciting foreground to the sound effects, the story will feel a lot more enjoyable to read. I like the font style you used but it's a bit hard to see them since they are not distinctive enough. The foreground could show the intensity of that attack and etc.
    Also give special effects to the sound effects words if you want to better show the meaning behind the effects.
    Differentiating the type of text would really make the comic easier to read and differentiate what's actually going on, be it 2 different persons using different attacks, the speech bubble, the environment sounds, etc etc..

    Like small text = weak, big text = strong, repeated text = repetition, skewed text = faster than normal, blurred text maybe slower or something, etc etc..
    Just see how you feel about them and use to your discretion
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    There's many example to follow online so just explore and see how can you better improve yourself. Good luck!
    Can say the story's interesting to read. Hope to see it finished.
     
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