cyberpoetry

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  1. over8000

    over8000 Eccentric Artist

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    well I'll assume that poetry can also be posted on this section so...

    this is what what happens when a cyberpunk fanboy tries poetry (something postmodern I guess)
    Ectasy, while the helmet is on my head, the demon takes my soul.
    Finally out of prison, got arrested in my flesh only for being too human.
    Optic fiber as veins, bloodstreams of nickel and cober, silicon nervs.
    dreams dyed as a hologram, reality becomes a simulacrum of my mind.
    Crossed the fronteirs of the net and the meatspace, only to find you.
    A void made of anxiety, until you connect. I see you in the sky, raining strings.
    Random combination of characters: sometimes making a word, a sentence, a book with our story.
    Filled with hexadecimal clouds representing your picture inside my memory.
    Numbers and equations, formulas that narrates a chemichal apocalypse in my flesh, only when my mind is jacked into you.
    Raindrops becoming a grafical interface, the geometry shapes a melting ICE(1).
    It was worse than I tought, guess it was not easy meet myself.
    you turned the switch for depersonalization.
    The self made nothing, you shutted me down.

    (1)https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Intrusion_Countermeasures_Electronics

    This is it. this was originally two differents poems but then I realised that some lines of the second one could fit perfect into the first one, so what I did is kinda similar to the cut-up technique.

    here are the two original ones

    1
    "Ectasy, while the helmet is on my head, the demon takes my soul.
    A void made of anxiety, until you connect. I see you in the sky, raining strings.
    Random combination of characters: sometimes making a word, a sentence, a book with our story.
    Filled with hexadecimal clouds representing your picture inside my memory.
    Numbers and equations, formulas that narrates a chemichal apocalypse in my flesh, only when my mind is jacked into you.
    Raindrops becoming a grafical interface, the geometry shapes a melting ICE.
    you turned the switch for depersonalization.
    The self made nothing, you shutted me down."
    2
    "Finally out of prison, got arrested in my flesh only for being too human.
    Optic fiber as veins, bloodstreams of nickel and cober, silicon nervs.
    dreams dyed as a hologram, reality becomes a simulacrum of my mind.
    Crossed the fronteirs of the net and the meatspace, only to find you.
    I don't know you, but my simulation of will does.
    But I also feel scared of you, are you my hallucination?.
    It was worse than I tought, guess it was not easy meet myself."

    inspired by william gibson. cnc if you want, also tell me if there is something wrong with the grammar
     
  2. Lynus

    Lynus R.I.P Reginald.
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    It's too freeverse for my liking, there's some meaning to it, but it;s mostly literal, but idk, I;d rather much prefer some deeper meaning behind it. It is poetry after all.
     
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