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Raider's Comic Gallery

Discussion in 'Comic Galleries' started by Raider, Aug 19, 2010.

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  1. Raider

    Raider Veteran Membah'

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    Welcome to my comic gallery! :lelele:

    Current Series: Navita

    Page 01: The Story Begins

    Page 02: Spare the Young

    Page 03: A New Partner

    Page 04: New Work

    Page 05: Lazarus

    Page 06: Was it wise?

    Current Page:

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    Author's Notes:

    My writers block is gone :D Hopefully this lasts a long time.

    Credits:

    Programs:

    Maplestory
    Bannedstoy
    Macromedia Fireworks 8
    Paint.NET

    Maps:

    Hurious
    JaktheHobo

    Fonts:

    DaFont.com

    Websites:

    Maplemation

    Sprites:

    Taki for the "Blue Rose" (Gun)

    If I forgot to credit you for anything you see then please inform me in a respectable manner and I will do my best to correct it as soon as possible.

    And lastly, please C&C the hell out of my comics. It will help me get better, and keep me inspired. :blush:

    Enjoy reading~!!!!! -Raider
     
  2. thedarkcheese

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    These are good I like these :blush: I'll leave the CnC to everyone else, lol. But I'm going to follow this comic.:bawws:
     
  3. jackycrazy

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    It's quite good...
    But the arrangement of the comic is quite weird...
    Like the second row,Petronus click the gun and the page showing bullet flying is below the second row...
    Maybe you should tell people how's your arrangement next time...
     
  4. Raider

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    Actually, that 4 panel section is supposed to be a split second moment. It goes click, bad guy hears the click and realizes something bad will happen, gun fires, bullet flies. I hope that clears it up :)
     
  5. Uri

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    Chat bubbles are quite bad, He is holding the gun wrongly, The gun should be above the hand and now behind.
    Panels are quite good.
    -Waits for more-
     
  6. Raider

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    New Comic?! O-o Yes it is! :D I know it's not my longest comic ever but I only needed to progress the story a little bit this time :P Enjoy + CnC + Say whether you like the style with or without outline!
     
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    Yay they're back :D
     
  8. Raider

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    Yes they are! :D Hopefully they stay that way! :P
     
  9. Raider

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    Updated again! Page 4! CnC please :hee: Enjoy Reading! ::D:
     
  10. Tom

    Tom Retired Staff
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    In the first panel (not the banner), was the dialogue suppose to be blurred? o:
     
  11. Raider

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    Yes, actually. It was to signify that he was not paying attention, but I didn't want to blur it too much. I wanted to leve it so others could still see what it said. :)
     
  12. Tom

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    Mmkays, other than that I hope the story opens up more soon C:
     
  13. Samuel09XD

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    sorrry but the arrangement is weird and i wish there was an intro. but not a bad comic btw
     
  14. Raider

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    @Tom: Just consider this a very un-eventful intro :P It will open up though, don't worry :D

    @Samuel: I dunno :/ I'm not a big fan of the classic "What has happened - what is happening - obvious foreshadowing" I like to reveal detail throught the story so the reader can peice things together, plus I'm really bad with intros XD
     
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    Yay originality.
     
  16. Raider

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    Ok....this somewhat annoys me for three reasons:

    1) It's clear sarcasm which provides no help. I'm not saying don't use sarcasm, but provide a little extra besides the sarcasm. Maybe some help? :bs:

    2) "You're doing it wrong", doesn't help nearly as much as "You're doing it wrong. Here is how to fix it." (Same reason as before, but clearly emphasis is needed).

    3) I still have an ENTIRE STORY to create. :wth:
     
  17. CaptainEagle

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    And this somewhat annoys me for one reason.

    1) I wasnt being sarcastic.

    I dont give criticism without walls of texts. Ya'll should know that. You cant tell much about a story for a first few pages. But I like what i see so far, plot wise.

    So Calm Down Gurl, have a tequila and make mo comics.
     
  18. Raider

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    Well, I feel extremely stupid, and I suppose I owe you an apology. I apologize. I'm so used to what most people do for sarcasm which is a short comment a period (At least from what I've seen). So I am sorry. I was probably just frustrated about something :P

    And I haven't seen you around the comic section at all, besides this so I didn't about your CnC. :P

    And...Gurl? lol :fuckyeah:
     
  19. CaptainEagle

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    YOUR A GURL IN MY MIND.

    Also i was on bsbg in the comics section like 24/7 lol.
     
  20. Raider

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    Dang it! Why must I be a lady person! :rage:

    I knew about the bsbg comics. I just meant I haven't seen you on this comic section
     
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