Shadow Storm Online

Discussion in 'Comics' started by Asphyxia, Dec 27, 2019.

  1. Asphyxia

    Asphyxia Newbie

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    Hello everyone, I am starting to get into comics, because I am not a very good animator. I want to hone my storytelling abilities and want to provide something for the community! Appreciate any type of CnC! I took inspiration off of LGHacker for his title card. Please enjoy the comic and let me know what I can do to improve.

    CHAPTER 1: The Launch of SSO
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    Also I should probably state.. I wrote my name as Libra and not Asphyxia..

    LGHacker - Title Card Inspo
    Azu - Lead Thief Thug
     
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  2. 5-H-S

    5-H-S Newbie

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    It looks good for starting, in the first panel after the title, it's a bit of a blurry close up, setting the transform tool to nearest neighbor could help if your using photoshop. You could also add a sepia or a grey filter on the part where they show Soulblade.

    In my opinion, when the first character appears, it seems he starts to speak to his friends too "quickly", i would add a couple of panels showing how the main character got from where he came from to where he met his friends. it could be a few panels of the first character walking or jumping, etc.

    This could help give more details of the kind of scenery in their environment. You could also make it so that his friends were in the middle of a conversation, before he found them, and he could be interrupting their conversation lol.

    I'd still like to know what happens next, as it seems the new people are from a different friend group or a rival group..

    Keep up the good work!
     
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