Wanderer in Green

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  1. Skytower

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    #1 Skytower, Dec 7, 2015
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    Cool Story bro~
    lol and cool fx. Looks nice. I don't think you messed up anything. Though I'd prefer tittles on my comic pages ^^"
     
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    If you want some cnc, I just don't really like the font that you used. Imo, more comic-y fonts would be better. Same with the SFX, the font is a lil bland. I would also add a little bit more of them sprinkled across your page, like on the "Whoa, okay" panel. Also I really didn't like how the font size kept changing, but again that's just my opinion. Pretty in media res, but that's a style, so yea. Anyways, other than that formatting that you already know about, looks good to me! Keep it up man.
     
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    Yeah I finished Watchmen earlier and I took some cues and am trying out something without SFX and a pretty standard layout. The text changing thing is awkward I agree.
     
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    Updated with page 2. Blood's pretty fun
     
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    Aaaand another page. More blood. More death. More fun.
     
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    Shit's pretty cool !
    I would argue about something concerning the sameness of each image, definitely mess around with the settings and whatnot dude. It could help dramatise each scene or just add to the mood - like in Page 2's ending.
    Love it, cant wait to see more.
     
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    Are you talking about filters, panel shape, etc.?

    I used to use a bunch of soft black brushes around the edges of each panel for intense scenes but wanted to test how it would be like without. I agree it'll help dramatize things though.
     
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    All of the above and more !
     
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    Page 4 is upperoni. No killing this time. Just death and sadness. Also used a bunch of soft black brush on edges of panels for epic lighting.

    Also I love continuity. Which manifests itself into a bloody mop.

    And then I realize I misspelled a name and I'll go change that right now shit
     
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    And page 5. Something something plot. This one's a bit short but hey there's people talking.
     
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    this is really good, the graphics are amazing aswell, i would love to read more
     
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    the story is great, please make more
     
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    It's late but that's not stopping me from getting out sweet page 6. Now there's some action.

    And now exams.
     
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    Bam bam thank you ma'am cuz I just did page 7 and it's great.

    This one let me focus on facial expressions a little more than usual, but it could still use improvement.

    And no the last sequence doesnt remind you of naruto stfu
     
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    Whoa. Hey guys. Welcome to EB games.
    Page 8. Wanderer in Green. Xbox One.
    Copy that.

    There's finally humor for the first time since like page 1. And it's the only page without any death or violence so yay for family friendliness.

    Also triple post I'm so lonely
     
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    Very good! Didn't like the first one so much, but it got better and better after that.
     
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    Whoa Merry Christmas guys! Page 9 is my gift to you.

    Yeah it's only 8 panels. Yeah it's really short. Don't talk about it. Not doing comics is really fun
    Just think of it as an extension to page 8

    I also might've made the bottom gutter too big
     
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    Page 10 is up and running now. To make up for the meager amount of panels in the last page, this baby has much more. And a good amount of dialogue to go with it.

    I put a bit more detail in terms of facial expression in this page, which can be hard at times since one of my characters wears a bandana that covers his eyebrows...

    Nonetheless, lots of tension and stuff happening. Strap yourself in for a bit of reading. Also got to dig into my weapons folder again so yay