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  1. Tom

    Tom Retired Staff
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    Hello, I came back from the dead. This is my first comic in I think 2 years? There were some things that I messed up, forgot/got too lazy to fix, and I kind of rushed it so I could go on vacation tomorrow.

    Also, I'm starting school soon so expect production to be rather slow. However, I plan on making short comics (5-8 panels at most and funnier) that is a parallel story to the main story, but just from a different character's perspective.

    Special thanks to: Dally, Heki, Aidan, and other people. As always, cnc is welcomed...please.

    I'll leave this here until I release the first official issue then I'll move it to the comic gallery. Without further adieu, enjoy.

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  2. Aidan

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    Misalignment here:

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    Otherwise, great work Tom. Keep it up!
     
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  3. Lynus

    Lynus R.I.P Reginald.
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    You're so good at comics !
    You should be the Comic Team Leader !!
     
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    Nice shit. Can't wait for part 2.
     
  5. bluezemmi

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    I can see that the second page was hella rushed.
    From Page 2 the 4th panel to the 5th panel was it a weird follow up.
    Try not to rush pages. You want the readers to understand what is happening.

    Idk what happened in the last panel from page 2.
    Where did that guy come from?

    I recommend you use black outlines for your panels and a bit of surface blur.
    Makes the page sexy.
     
  6. Dally

    Dally Watcher of the Land
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    Going with what bluezemmi said, your comic style hasn't aged very well unfortunately. The text feels a little too small at times for the format, and the panels feel a little dull. I recommend making the panels more "dynamic" by making some of them go diagonal when showing actions scenes. Nonetheless, great to have you back and practicing, Tom!
     
  7. Tom

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    Thanks for all the criticism! Yeah, I agree that the panels were a bit stale. I wanted to do a different style, but I'll definitely start fresh on the next issue.
     
  8. CCshinobi

    CCshinobi Filmmaker, Animator
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    This is like the start of some epic assassin/espionage film or manga. Dat unapologetic blood tho
    Nice work man, hope we get to learn more about these characters. Their motives and who I should be rooting for is still a bit unclear, but I'm sure you'll verify that in the next issue c:
     
  9. skillzicee

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    so like, when is the next part coming? .3.
     
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