Johano's Revised Bio

Johano's Story:
A long time ago, there was a drastic war between Heaven and Hell. The war took place on the "Land of the Living". Many inhabitants here died being in the middle of the battlefield, so the people decided to end the war. Offering two women up as sacrifices to the Devil and Gods, the war ended shortly after. Both sides decided to call off their forces and accept the people's terms. They must never invade Earth for the rest of eternity. "This is an old story talked about here in Hell. Knowing how I was born is nothing to be proud of." Two years after the war, the Devil's successor was born. This newborn child was me, and my mother who was given up as sacrifice, named me Johano Sarutobi. Being born as the devil's son. I've yearned to reach Earth's surface at a young age. My father obviously denied me of doing such a thing. "Father and I weren't on the best of terms, we often fought whenever I disobeyed him." My father often blamed my mother for my lack of lust for destruction. She was the kindest person I knew, but I had to go. So I left home, making my way to the only exit I knew of. I made my way to conquer the "1000 Trial Tower" (A fortress containing 1000 powerful demons locked up to prevent humans and from invading Hell). I'm surprised I managed to complete this when I was 8 years old. Defeating every demon took me at least 26 Earth months. Back then, I let my victories go to my head and believed I could do anything. "I was a fool to think that Earth was as peaceful as they said." Residents on Earth didn't appreciate my unexpected arrival. I was captured and sealed away with holy magic by some guardians without hesitation. 12 years later, a girl named Ariana appeared and unsealed me, claiming that she needs my assistance. I had no idea what she was up to, nor did I fully understand her intentions. She had to be something special if she could undo my seal. Knowing that she freed me, I decided to lend my assistance. I'm now living in secret and avoiding attention everywhere I go. But there are other things I have to do and someone to see...

Statistics:
- "Creative Pyrokenetic" - Able to use and summon flames with the power of his imagination
- Sword Fighter - Handed down from his father, he wields a shape-shifting sword called Helzura. A sword that great complements fire and lighting magic

Abilities:
- Dimension Breaker - Able to summon or mimic characters from different dimensions (This gives him the chance to change strategies mid-battle) (Only able to summon characters around his own strength) He is even able to summon items to aid him, this also includes items across dimensions (The problem with this ability is that it takes a lot of energy to use, and if wounded may leave him unable to use it)
- Immune - Unaffected by non-magic attacks (All non-magic such as normal sword and bullet attacks phase right through him, even human hands)
- Receives less damage from fire and dark magic
- Absorb - Any source of heat from steam to magma can heal his wounds (If he is extremely wounded in battle, his healing factor is cancelled out)
- Immortality - Death is meaningless to Johano. Even if he "dies", his body will return to Hell to recover. (This also means he has to go through the "1000 Trial Tower" again since the same principle applies to them)

Personality:
Having his mother's heart and his father's strength, he often holds back in battle. Usually he avoids conflict and naturally keeps his cool. But if anyone or something he cares about is in danger, he doesn't hold back. Johano has a weird habit of flashy finishers, making him go overboard in battle.

Likes and Dislikes:
- He likes hot and spicy foods, jokes, training and his mother Starlessa
- He dislikes his father, criminals, and holy magic users

"I've been away from home for so long. I hardly remember the face of my mother... Starlessa... sorry I left home like that."

[Bio is missing sprites; please wait until proper sprites are made]

Thanks Fawful, your input is noted and will the bio will be edited in due time.

DDFawfulGuy said: (post #330245)

So you've probably got more info you haven't shared yet, and I like the general direction of the story.
But this bio still needs a lot of fine tuning.
Good luck!

You were correct to assume that there was missing info. I have adjusted in a more detailed version. Hope it's to your liking.

DDFawfulGuy said: (post #330500)

Overall, I think you've made some big improvements from last time. There's just a few more places you need to make seem logical now.
Keep up the good work!

Thank you, I highly appreciate your support.
In regards to Jo's immunity to physical things, yes, you are correct about it being a trigger.

"Uhh...."

Couldn't you have edited this thread?

I'm pretty late to review this, but here are my comments about what you changed after DDFawfulGuy gave his remarks.

"Story"

What's so special about the two female humans used for the sacrifice that gods and demons would end their own dispute? The humans had nothing to do with the war and happened to be in the middle of the crossfire.
Moreover, what do the humans have as a precautionary measure so that the two sides won't decide to stage their battle on Earth again?

| "Two years after the war, [Johano] was born." |
| "[Johano's] mother who was given up for the sacrifice [that ended the war 2 years prior]" |
How?

Johano wants to leave Hell because he doesn't like its immoral practices and system (mentioned in the previous therad), but I'd like to know how a demi-human (Johano specifically) functions. Is he a demon, physically, and a human, mentally? How does this affect his status in Hell as "the Demon's successor" and the way he's treated by those other than his father?

The 1000 Trial Tower. I see that you're very adamant about including this detail in your story, but its purpose is still unclear even from the previous thread. Standing between Hell and Earth are 1000 demons supposedly stationed there to prevent humans to invade Hell. There's little understanding to how the humans play a part in your story even from the beginning with the war between demons and gods.

| "I'm surprised I managed to complete this when I was 8 [Earth?] years old. Defeating every demon took me at least 26 Earth months." |
If you're to define time, keep it consistent.
Furthermore, Johano completed, or cleared, the tower when he was 8. This would mean that he entered when he was either 5 or 6 years old? I'm surprised that he finds it surprising that he can manage such a feat considering his experience.

"Abilities"

Creative Pyrokinesis.
As DDFawfulGuy asked, what's the difference between pyrokinesis and creative pyrokinesis? Fire is a form of energy, so where is this energy coming from?

Sword Fighter.
When and why did Johano's distant father give him a sword?

Dimension Breaker.
If a demi-human has this ability, I'd be worried about what abilities an actual demon, say his father, or a deity would have. The existence of this ability makes the point of the God-Demon war seem needless.

Immune.
But like, how? I can understand your him being resistant to fire magic because that happens to be what he specializes in, but all non-magic attacks? Not just resistant to physical attacks, but the attacks phase right through him?

Absorb.
This. Instead of being a healing ability, this should just be the explanation for Johano's pyrokinetic abilities.

Immortality. -"Even if he "dies", his body will return to Hell to recover. (This also means he has to go through the "1000 Trial Tower" again since the same principle applies to them)"
I highly doubt that he would be able to go through the Tower again to escape Hell if he were to ever return. Knowing his actions, it'd be more logical that he'd be imprisoned/sealed by his own father. Of course, if Johano manages to escape his father and reattempt the 1000 Trial Tower, then unless the Tower had been modified, I don't see much purpose to it anymore. It might as well just be a literal gate if a 6-year demi-human is able to get past it.

Aranimation said: (post #330700)

Aran,
I've read your response from top to bottom and you've made some very valid points. However some of your questions cannot be answered within this thread. I will adjust the bio at a later date.
If you want some of your questions answered, be sure to DM me in Discord