MBR Bluezemmi vs Echo

First off, congratulations on the godlike pun at the end. Don't care what Kim says. Your effects were really good, especially the first panel, which I liked a ton for some reason. The use of perspective was well done as well. However, I felt like the dialogue could be improved on. "Take this" was only repeated twice, but I already felt like it was overused. In panel 10-11, the one where your character is shocked and holding the scythe, I felt like the position is a little bit awkward, and it doesn't really appear like the character is completely holding the scythe. There are restrictions on what you can do with maplemation characters however, so that's just a minor criticism.

Thank you for the great comic!

Though your comic felt shorter than BlueZemmi's, I really liked it! I felt that your panels were very sharp and clear, and it was easy to see things such as the background and character details. The 2nd page is repeated twice (no problemo). The facial expressions made my heart laugh and my face contort into a slight grin. I do feel that the fight went over too fast and it was a bit one sided, but it felt to me like you sacrificed panel count for more detail on the panels themselves. On the panel where there is a shockwave, I felt like the text was too plain for me. Just a white boom, maybe you can use a more stylized texture like the ones you used for the "shhh" and "klink". Remember to put periods! :D (unless it was intentional).

Overall, very well done. Thank you!

Both of you guys made great comics, much better than I could ever do. However, I liked Echo's style a little bit more than BlueZemmi's. It just felt more "clean" to me for some reason. Thank you both again!

You could've done better with the storyline, to be honest.

The layout and effects are aesthetically pleasing to the eyes, and the sprites are well used throughout the comic. A bit blurry here and there, and you may have abused the smudge tool too much. A little too bright to the eyes (but that may be just my own opinion because I just woke up.)

I really like the layout and how it's put together, the usual techniques of the comic leader.



It's not very visible, but did you just take a piece of the map, flipped it, and merged the two together in this scene? I understand you're still learning at mapping, but you could've placed more effort into this. You could've added more trees, put in different types of shrubs, and whatnot.



I appreciate the pun, and you did your best to execute a certain scene where your character tries to be badass while defeating the other character, yadda yadda. For the tiles, I don't think you're in a mountain. The next time you try to make a scene concerning this kind of flooring, I suggest you lower the stone floor a bit.



For this certain scene, it took me a while to realize Echo is hiding behind a rock, and you're not showing a separate panel. Again, the floor is concerning. Don't worry though, because again, you're still learning. Perhaps lower the ledge (where the statue sits on)?

That's all I have to say for you, Zemmi. Good job, otherwise, and thank you for the lovely comic.

Hoo boy. Get ready for a wild ride. I'm impressed by the front page of the comic. You did well to execute each scene, and the background behind the panels caught my eye. The little comedy bits were a nice touch, as well as the tiny sound effects. It felt more lively, and very life-like.

The fighting scene wasn't very heavily brutal or added with many effects, and I like how you focused more on the environment rather than the fight scene. You did well to execute the story, too.

The comic invokes a minimalistic feel and had imitated a manga-esque kind of layout. Good job.



The shadows are very well placed, and it indicates the presence of a tree where Zemmi lies under. Could've added a shadow under Zemmi, as well, since the lighting is focused on that very specific scene.

I would also like to applaud you for looping the grass tiles where Zemmi lies on, as if to indicated a real grass bed. I'm liking it so far.



Look at that very well-placed character on the grass. And the night sky, shooting star, and the tree-
Ahem. I like the focus on this, overall. You executed the scene well, and I like the little comedy bit on Zemmi. Maybe a bit of shadowing would make it look better?



In this scene, the grass looks a bit blurred and resized a bit too much. It just makes it look out of place (to me, I guess), but you're still learning, so it's okay.



The ground is concerning, but you did your best to portray it. Could've elevated the front ledge, though (encircled).



I actually like how this was executed. Although blurry and out of place, it has a certain perspective focus to it. Good job.

That's all for you, Echo. Good job, and thank you too, for the lovely comic.