MBR Graceling vs Trystin

Apr 30, 2018 • 4:32 PM • 5 likes

Ready for another MBR?!
Theme: 1v1
Duedate: 1 week
Time Limit: 30 seconds minimum

Grace’s animation: [MEDIA=youtube]Ij02uY1vh0k[/MEDIA]
Grace’s MBR profile: http://maplemation.com/threads/gracelings-mbr-profile.34810/
Grace’s notes: I honestly didn't think I could finish this in time but wow over a mintue long! This was actually really fun to make on my part (even though there are som mistakes here and there c":) So enjoy I guess?!

Trystin’s animation: [MEDIA=youtube]SzgQM9boWWU[/MEDIA]
Trystin’s MBR profile: http://maplemation.com/threads/trystins-mbr-profile-2018-version.34821/
Trystin’s notes: None

Vote fairly, don’t vote out of favortism, yada yada.

Epicness182

Apr 30, 2018 • 7:08 PM • 4 likes

Looks like MBR's are making their way back.

"Grace"

Grace:
Congrats on completing your part.
Also A+ for it being complete and decent.
There's not much Cnc i can really give on it other then this and its just me being picky, so take is as you please.

The transition was sudden so was the face change I recommend at least in one in-between use opacity to give it a nice blend.
https://gyazo.com/b084b6f01c117ccfc8f1db442e764662

The effects and sfx went before the actual swing, does it work? Eh maybe but it just felt off to me.
https://gyazo.com/659c2e7425a85f746c1b115ca7c7d819

Again just preferences.

Overall, hey ya did it. Congrats and keep up the good work.

"Trystin"

You would've had alittle more points in my book if you got rid of all the guide lines. It just makes the presentation look bad.
There are some pretty obvious mistakes that I wouldnt call nitpicking.

Chat box didn't appear.
https://gyazo.com/8f1161b764175cb64d4b47e8877b84a8

Part of the animation had choppy skewing and resizing.
Overall, keep practicing and please meet the min requirement.
If you don't take these matches seriously its gonna look bad on you.

My votes for grace.

DJTiki

Apr 30, 2018 • 7:18 PM • 8 likes

Yiiikes. Not even one.

It's almost like if you work dedicated towards a project instead of playing video games and talking trash for most of the week then you produce good results. You should probably stop trying to take MBRs if you aren't going to take it somewhat seriously, Trystin. You didn't even meet the main requirement on top of a choppy animation despite given ample time.

Good job, Grace. I already gave you plenty of CnC so I don't feel the need to restate myself.

Sleep

Apr 30, 2018 • 7:21 PM • 2 likes

First :eyes:

Okay here's my clearly unbiased cnc

"Grace"

Firstly There a clear lack of emotions in your animation it's like watching robots fighting lol
Like when you kicked him at 0:19 he frowned
But when you hit him with a fucking pole he didn't even blink lol
Also at 1:10 that "broken ground"
Doesn't fit with the ground you choosed it make even less sense with the blood
You're better off using the eraser tool to remove part of the ground to make it look how you want
Also if i got to nitpick
That demon girl at first look floating /levitating rather then flying
Also it's better to a white line for ice breaking

"trystin"

Trystin?
More like trytogetgudstin
...
0:09
A sudden guideline appeared !
0:10
Is that supposed to be ice ?
0:16
the stealth break laws of physics being shot like this
0:17
Another sudden guideline appears!
0:18
The slash effect you used doesn't seems to be fitting in the situation you used it in
Other in other words
Get better effects noob
0:20
There's seems to be a invisible monster that has taken you and grace along with sword

Pepsi101Loser

Apr 30, 2018 • 8:08 PM • 4 likes

Hope this doesn't seem biased.
I had high expectations, and looked forward to this MBR.

"Gracelinguru"

Can I just say... I am oh so very proud of you??
You've certainly improved since I've first met you, and I haven't even known you for that long, so that says alot.

Comment(s):
I understand the lack of facial expressions on Trystin's OC was due to his spritesheet lacking in providing what you needed, so you get a pass on that.

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I understood what you were trying to do with Trystin moving in the air, but i felt that it was a bit slow...
But that may be just me.

Other than that,
I looove :D
Keep on animatin~! You're doing FANTASTIC~!

Ps:
Throughout the whole animation process, you stayed focus and determined to finish this MBR. That is truly admirable, and I commend you for having the patience to complete this MBR. I know how busy you are with other collabs and stuff, so it truly amazes me at how well you did with this.

"Trystin"

I'm a tad bit disappointed. I wish you put as much effort into this as Grace did.

Comment(s):

I may be repeating what other's have pointed out, but whateva.

The guideline.... you could have at least gotten rid of that, c'mon? ://

The walk cycle you did in the beginning was kind of odd, you aligned at the head, rather than at the feet.

You failed to meet the time minimum of 30 seconds.
Stretching it out to 36 seconds of nothing happening doesn't help :^)

Also, If you read Grace's MBR Profile, she describes her OC's Powers. You made her use a fire ability..... Grace doesn't know how to use fire.

Grace was stressing about this MBR for a week, and It kind of makes you lose reputation points because you couldn't meet the requirements that YOU set up for this MBR in the first place.
I am curious as to why you challenged her in the first place if you weren't planning to take it seriously.
Next time, manage your time better. If you aren't going to put your all into something you commit yourself to, what's the point?

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"G E N X A C E"

Apr 30, 2018 • 10:06 PM

Wait, there are minimum requirements?

O h b o y . . .

UntitledOmega

Apr 30, 2018 • 11:08 PM

I warned you this would happen Trystin...

MBR Status: Nah

Flexation

May 01, 2018 • 2:22 AM • 2 likes

I have no clue what the whole lore is behind this mbr however I will say...

Grace you did really good job with it. The effects are really good, the physics and the bouncyness to the character flows really nicely and makes everything look natural. Very fluid and I can easily tell you put effort into this. Excited to see more of your character and more of your work :D.

Trystin it didn't really seem like you were really prepared for this to be honest. From what I see in others CnC you dictated the regulations (so technically you could have started working weeks in advanced knowing you were going to mbr Grace) and you still didn't put forth the best of your ability. I feel like you sorta have an understanding of what you are doing (with the guidlines and everything) but you executed it poorly. Like the others said and I'm repeating, you should take it a bit more seriously otherwise you waste everybody's time. All I can say is keep practicing dude.
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Also probably a nitpick but cut the video shorter dude, that went on for 16 seconds longer than it should have (thats probably because you wanted to hit that time requisite but still.)

SuperKimxD

May 01, 2018 • 3:03 AM • 1 likes

It'd be awesome if everyone could please try to keep conversation respectful and refrain from double posting. Thanks c:

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Nameomn

May 01, 2018 • 4:51 AM • 2 likes

Errr..
Not sure is it a maple battle royale or free ice cream.

"Grace, Brace yourself"

Beside pacing error and lack of weight/momentum when you moving objects around and both of them seem to have 200ping(if you know what I mean) mistake here and there, I would say it pretty ok.
My main complain is that It's too little going on in 1 minute spand and they look really silly to me, I can summarize as this

-Your char and your friend running toward to Trystin

-Your friend get shot by a non-impactful dodgable projectile(doesn't seem like ice either) but get hit anyways and never get up even when the fight is over. I was like "Where is she?"

-Trytsin act like he is the one shooting it but those up comming ice ball seem like it came out of thin air. Because there is no sound or effect when he casting them.

-After you deflected all of them and Trystin jump attack. You present to me with a fight that have a sword for the sake of having them, Like after some sword crash and Trystin's thrust, You have a chance to counter attack him but Thrust The Sword into the ground and punch kick him instead (don't even get it off either) = =ll

-Trystin doesn't show any sign of injury after get punch so hard He flied into electric pole.. ok

-Trystin cast his ice power and your char's feet get stuck in ice so when she got hit by a solid object she have to either Fall to the side/Break her leg/Ice floor or ball shatter but instead She tanked them. I would recommand you make her change pose that has similar footting and not just shanking one.

-She got froze trystin walk up to her gg and walk away like a good old Cliché, Oh she's BREAKING IT errrhh... black line?? on ice?? Why not white?

-Trystin turn around / throw a couple of ice at her / dash in / get grabed by the laggiest grab ever lol / smash slams jams / Finally throw him at the electric pole / Trystin seem to losing connection as he SSSllloooowwwlllyyyy fly toward to it / You lift the whole electric pole up (WOW I wonder why it doesn't fall when he hit it last time just look at how deep the pole burried in the ground) but srsly I cant really blame you on this XD But she can teleport? What!? Why did she have to walk to him then?

-Trystin got homeruned into the sky, At this point I think he ragequited becasue his lack of reaction to pains, And then you teleport on top and pwned him.

"Trystin Listen Up"

Bro you have a LOT to learn before you take your step out there man, When we see MBR we expect both maker to be evenly match or atleast has a very distinctable animation style becasue It's would be really fun that way and not someone just giving free win to others.

Animation / Tweening / Resizing error aside

Your animation look so gimmicky like jump on 3 poles to throw scabbard at her, Where she just politely wait there for you to do it...
If she continue to throw more things at you It would have make sense.

I hope both of you will this pick up(Don't take it personally) and use it to improve your animation in the future.
So I can enjoys more of good MBR.

Neil

May 02, 2018 • 7:24 PM • 2 likes

Congrats on your flawless victory, Grace!
I'll update your profile soon.

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